I’ve drafted MM15 five times, only because the credit from going 3-0 every time has made it not too painful to my wallet. Every time, it’s been one of the following: either A. you first pick the best card in a pack, decide what archetype it’s strongest in, and intentionally pick that archetype (passing first-pickable cards that don’t fit that archetype, or you find out you get cut 3-4 picks in and have to salvage from what’s open. For this reason, I recommend trying to stay heavy into one color of your archetype for those forcing picks.

I think you should motivate your picks more. It would be good to lay out a plan and explain how your picks would fit in that plan. Also for me the draft was very hard to follow. Especially the p1p5 Frogmite blew my mind, because until then you didn’t have any artfacts.
I have no experience with drafting MM2, so it could be that a p1p5 Frogmite is a huge signal to go for Affinity, but please explain so. As it was, it all seemed to be a bit random.

That’s one way of doing it but I don’t think the only good way. Certainly it’s not what I’ve seen from some pro drafters.

In any case, it’s entirely possible I’m just unconsciously very biased toward Affinity for some reason.